This learning outcome is focused on the ability to critically read a peer’s project and make constructive suggestions for change, in addition to the ability to evaluate one’s own work and identify opportunities for specific improvement. In the paragraphs that follow, I will describe my peer editing process using perspectives (ideas, claims) and the explanation of text’s relationship to them. In addition to local editing with signal phrases and in text citations, I also followed the writer’s thesis to the conclusion.
Introduction: Peer reviewing a paper can be very beneficial in many different ways. You begin to see how different writing styles may be better for you and how you learn. Along with being able to spot issues in your writing that you have not seen before. This is also good for the peer because they can see where they have gone wrong in their paper.
Thesis: Yes I believe that the significance of the problem was explained very well she went into detail on how the problem could be solved and why it would need to be, she also talks about her very own personal story and feelings over the problem which i thought was very insightful.
Claims/Reasearch: One claim In the essay that i found interesting was “Back during the early ages of humankind, we were not like our present-day selves. We had the constant presence of nearby predators and the looming fear of the natural environment.” I agree with this, at a younger age growing up is difficult not knowing what is to come at a early age like being in school not knowing if your at the other kids level or if your doing as well on quizzes as other kids was something to fear. I also feel there was good quotes and citations used from the reading to back everything up thats being said making the points valid.
Transitions: I feel the transitions from story to story were pretty good she was able to transition into the next essay with a story she had growing up which I thought was very affective and made them look smooth.
Mechanics: Id like to say the paper is very interesting she gave a lot of personal information which i thought really made the paper and gave a whole perspective on the problem while reading. The organization of the paper was affective there were a couple grammar mistakes and some places where id change the look of the document but other then that it was overall a good paper.
